Hallo
also ich bin im moment an meinem gastfamilienbrief zu gange Der soll ganz schön lang werden und i.wie find ich sind ein paar unnötige dinge dabei aber es soll das halt alles rein auch mit den Fächer und soo… also vielleicht ist ja jemand so nett und korrigiert schonmal das was ich bis jetzt hab…wäre echt super Danke (Mein englisch ist nicht soo gut…sry )
Dear host families and Rotary Club
First of all I would like to thank you for taking the time to read my letter. I‘ll now share some information about me. My name is Kira hust and I was born on November 19th, 1996. Currently I attend the 9th grade at school.
In my leisure I like to do my hobbies. I meet often my friends and do a lot of things with them. I like to read books and listen to music but I am also chat with friends on the computer.
At School I have 14 subjects which change each day. I have English, French, and German, mathematics, biology, chemistry, physics, biology / chemistry, music, sports, religion, politics, history and geography. The next semester I’ll have art instead of music. My favorite subjects are music, biology and history. In the sixth grade, we were able to choose Latin or French. I chose French because the language is beautiful and I enjoy talking it. And in the eighth grade we were able to choose between biology / chemistry, business / profession, mathematics / computer science and Spanish. I chose biology / chemistry, because I am also very interested in science. To me it seemed at that time still too difficult to learn Spanish. However, I really want to learn Spanish and would have chosen it in the tenth grade. I would be very happy if I could learn Spanish in my exchange country.
A normal school day begins for me at six o’clock a.m. when I wake up. At seven o’clock I drive by bus to school, which starts at quarter to eight. The bus stop is only five minutes from our home and the bus ride takes about 20 minutes. I have Tuesdays, Thursdays and Fridays until One o’clock School and on Mondays and Wednesdays until half past four because we have courses in the afternoon. When I got home my mother is usually there and I eat lunch. I often come home at the same time like my older sister or my younger brother, then we eat together. After that, I’m doing my homework and my hobbies.
At my school, i’m in students help students and give tuition. I am also active in the homework help, where I do homework with the younger students and learn for tests with them. I am the class president and represent them in the student council. I also look after our class trips or projects. In my class we are 30 students in my year we are ca.80 students.
I would describe my home as very tidy, but also cozy. We have a house in a cul de sac with a small garden but a large balcony. We have a large basement where are the kitchen and the living room. Our nursery and bathroom and the bedroom of my parents are upstairs. My sister, certainly, must go through my room to get in her room. But that’s not a big problem. I do homwork at my room and study there for School. My grandparents live with us in the house but their have a own apartment with a separate entrance. Also they are often in Spain because they have a house there.
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So das ist jetzt der rest von meinem Brief und ich würde mich echt super freuen wenn jemand da auch mal ebend drüber gucken würde und mir verbesserungen sagt DANKE!
Now we come to my hobbies. I’m very intrestet in sport and music. I started with five years of gymnastics and with eight I started athletics, too. I got interested in these sports through my sister. Athletics I did until I was 13 years old. I was often city champion and was in many competitions. With 14 I started playing handball, because I wanted to try out something new and wanted to play in a team. I have handball two to three times a week and we train for 1 1/2 hours. For music, I am also interested very early. In the first year of school I got guitar lessons and play now for nine years, acoustic and electric guitar. Since a year I have piano lessons. Currently I’m playing more piano then guitar, because I have more fun while I’m playing and it’s something new what I can learn. Every Tuesday I look after children, who are between 5 and 8 years old, in the YMCA. We play games with them, paint with them or go out with them. Of course, we always keep a prayer in which we tell about God. I enjoy working with the children very much even though it is sometimes very exhausting.
When we have vacation, we usually go with the family on a journey. We drive every summer for three weeks to Croatia with our camping car to a camping ground, where we have many friends who are always come there, too. We also go in the Easter holidays or holidays in the fall often to the Netherlands. There, we also do camping. I was already in the holiday without my parents. I was on a trip of YMCAs for a week and with other families for a few days on Juist. In the fall of 2011 I was with a friend for a weekend in Berlin by a friend of my parents who had invited us. This was really exciting. I like to travel and look to foreign countries and cities. That’s why I want to do an exchange year. I hope through life with a host family I can get a lot of impressions into the culture and immerse in the culture how it wouldn’t be possible for a tourist.
What are some things I do not like? Well, I actually like eating anything. I like to try foreign food and drinks. I am very animal-loving people. By people I do not like it so much if someone is conceited or someone is not honset. I would describe myself as Im a friendly, open-minded and cheerful girl. I think my strong characteristics areI am ambitious and curious about other people. I am tolerant and accept different opinions. I think my weak characteristics are I am a little bit chaotic and unorganized. About my plans for the future, I cannot say so much. I am only 15 years old and I'm not sure as what I want to work. I think I study something which will perhaps have to do with languages. I could also imagine working as a teacher but I'm still very unsure and hope that the exchange year further helps to make a decision. I hope to become through the exchange year more independent and learn to see the world from different points of view. I would like to use the chance a foreign culture and a foreign country to get to know and a foreign language to perfection. I want to experience something new and meet new people. I'm really looking forward to the time we will spend together. So I hope you enjoyed reading my letter. Im looking forward to hearing from you soon !
Greetings from Germany,
Kira.
Die Sachen, die ich in ((( ))) geschrieben habe, hab ich nicht verstanden, ansonsten hab ich mal so korrigiert, was mir aufgefallen ist und so wie ich denke, dass es richtig ist. Einige Dinge hab ich auch leicht gekürzt oder umgeschrieben.
Allgemein kann ich dir sagen, dass du oft extrem „Deutsch“ denkst. Du übersetzt den deutschen Satz manchmal direkt ins Englische, ohne die englische Grammatik zu beachten.
Now Id like to tell you something about my hobbies. I'm very interested in sports and music. At the age of five I started doing gymnastics. Moreover Ive been doing athletics for about five years. I joined in many competitions and became city champion several times . At the age of 14 I started playing handball because I wanted to try something new and to play in a team. Currently I train twice to three times a week for 1 1/2 hours.
I also got interested in music pretty early. I have played the guitar – both acoustic and electric - for nine years and the piano for one year now.
Every Tuesday I look after some children who are between five and eight years old. We play games, paint or go out with them. (((Of course, we always keep a prayer in which we tell about God.))) I enjoy working with children very much, even though it sometimes is quite exhausting.
During the holidays I usually travel with my family. Every summer we spend three weeks in Croatia, in our caravan or at the camping ground, where we have many friends who come there every year, too. We also do camping in the Netherlands pretty often.
So far I have gone on vacation without my parents once. (((I spend a week with other families on Juist))). In autumn 2011 I went to Berlin with a friend of my parents who had invited us. This was really exciting. I enjoy travelling and experiencing foreign cultures. That’s why I would like to go abroad for one year. I hope I can get a far deeper impression of a foreign country by living with a host family, than I could get as a tourist.
I actually like eating anything. I enjoy tasting foreign food and drinks. Moreover I love spending time with animals. I would describe myself as a friendly, open-minded and cheerful girl. I think my strengths are that I am ambitious and enjoy meeting new people. Furthermore I am tolerant and accept different opinions. I think my weaknesses of character are that I am a bit chaotic and unorganized.
Yet I`m not quite sure about what I want to do after finishing school. I think I might study something related to a foreign language. I could also imagine working as a teacher but I’m still not sure and hope that I might get inspired during my time abroad.
I hope to become more independent and become more cosmopolitan. I would like to take the chance to get to know a foreign country and learn a new language. I want to experience something new and meet new people.
I’m really looking forward to the time we will spend together.
So I hope you enjoyed reading my letter. I`m looking forward to hearing from you soon !
Greetings from Germany,
Kira.
Also ich achte jetzt nict auf die Rechtschreibung Grammatik, weil ich darin auch nicht sonderlich gut bin:)
Aber ich habe ein paar anmerkungen zu deinem text…
… - wenn du schreibst, dass du gerne dinge mit deinen freunden unternimmst, gib beispiele, unter „a lot of things“ kann man sich nicht wirklich etwas darunter vorstellen und es könnet auch so wirken, als würdest du den ganzen tag mit deinen freunden nur unproduktiv chillen…
-Dann denke ich, dass es natürlich gut ist hineinzu schreiben, dass du jeden Tag unterschiedliche fächer hast, jedoch würde es glaube ich reichen, wenn du nur ein paar deiner Lieblingsfächer aufzählst und nicht alle;)
An was für Gastfamilien geht denn dieser brief? Denn so würden alle aus Englischsprachigen Ländern dich wahrscheinlich nicht nehmen, wegen "I would be very happy if I could learn Spanish in my exchange country. "
-Wie lange dein Bus fährt müssen sie glaube ich nicht wissen es reicht, wenn du schreibst, dass du um 6 aufstehst und mit dem Bus zur schule fährst. Auch, wann deine Schule an welchen Tagen zu ende ist, interessiert nicht wirklich, du könntest statt dessen schreiben, dass du manchmal noch nachmittags Unterricht hast, aber auch schon mal gegen 13.00 Uhr Schluss hast.
-Wo deine Eltern schlafen interessiert evt. auch nicht, aber, dass du geschrieben hast, dass deien schwester immer durch dein Zimmer hindurch muss finde ich gut!
Ok ich hoffe ich habe dich nicht irgendwie entmutigt, denn du hast eine schöne englische Sprache!
Du könntest den Text ja einfach mal deiner Englischlehrerin geben, damit sie ihn für dich durchsieht nach Gramatik Rechtschreibung.
Also den Text finde ich echt richtig gut gelungen!
Ich hätte nur einen kleinen Verbesserungsvorschlag, und zwar…
…„About my plans for the future, I cannot say so much. I am only 15 years old and I’m not sure as what I want to work.“
Den Satz könnte man evt. noch etwas umstellen, denn es kommt ein wenig so rüber, als wärst du noch ein kleines junges Mädchen(wegen only 15…), was du ja nicht bist, wie man im restlichen Text lesen konnte.
Vlt. schriebst du lieber etwas, wo du sagst, dass du ersteinmal dein Abitur machen möchtest, um danach zu studieren, evt. etwas, was mit Sprachen zu tun hat, was du später beruflich machen möchtest weißt du noch nicht so genau.
Es zeigt, dass du schon ein ziel hast, aber dein leben noch nicht komplett voraus planst:)
Also der Brief geht eig. nur an Gastfamilien in spanisch sprachigen Ländern deswegen hab ich das geschrieben…
und mit den Fächern und Bus und so dachte ich auch das, dass zuviel ist aber das soll alles rein weil den Brief liest auch der Austauschschüler der zu uns kommt …deswegen auch die Aufteilung von unserem haus und soo :)) Aber trotzdem danke :)) und das mit den freunden änder ich dann noch mal Danke :))
